Sleeping Valor

The life you'r e me a nt to have I am the family you keep in your heart The truest of your friends I am the lamp that shines your ...

Originally, my plan had been to tell you that you might want to split this into two (or even more) bits, since a lot of people are discouraged from reviewing ...

*nods* I loved it. My friends read it (even though she doesn't usually read these types of books) and recommended I read it. It's a good read and I found ...

I always was--either sleeping peacefully through it or up and at the window, watching in fascination as it came down. I think you should get rid of the '--' after ...

The trees swayed harmoniously in the channeled wind that crept around them, their shadows dancing lightly on the grass from the lanterns set around the large perimeter of the lake. ...

The sunset drips over the hill, A blaze of red, orange and pink ,[I would remove this comma, since the setence would read 'A blaze or red, orange and pink ...

The words are escaping, [Get rid of the space here] They’re flying away. I can’t find the rhythm, Or what to say. They pound in my head, A discord of ...

Creeping, Fleeing .[Period instead of comma] All of them Seeing. Hiding, Catching, Some of them Snatching. Running, Quicker .[I'd put a period here] A shiver, A flicker. Stumble, Move on. ...

"Time for bed." Those three words I feared the most. My initial reaction was to think this might sound better as 'Those were the three words I feared the most'. ...

I noticed a sparkle of purest golden beauty. As sweet as the first sunrise. Those most beautiful of eyes closed yet still i was there. Just making sure: You mean ...

*claps* I really liked this poem! XD The only thing I have to point out is that, since you are using punctuation, you need to have capitals at the beginning ...

One day I met a little bird It had a broken wing I bent down to him And he started to sing "Help me!" he seemed to say So I ...

11:23 PM YEAR 3021 It was dark out and the only things visible were the head lights [I believe that headlight is one word, not two] of rapidly moving vehicles ...

Hand me a canvas Amidst the choir of creased chalk Pluck the feathers of joy for a brush Paint with the colours of love Ink dripping with new found bliss ...

/. Prologue The gates of hell sure didn't seem as scary as I thought it would. ['gates of hell' = they would rather than 'it would'. This is a nice ...